by JimBob44
STRANGE! At first, I thought he was an obnoxious, overprivileged rich dude. Then the ending arrived, and I decided he was making Genies. Now I don't know what to think, other than this was one strange story! It was entertaining but strange and unsettling.
OK, definitely 5*, just for originality alone.
Buuuuut I Reallllly think you should revisit this. Give us a little more backstory and maybe 'where does it go from here?' Because this is DAMNED interesting.
Fascinating, but unsettling. This would have been perfect for an episode of the old Twilight Zone series. It would be cathartic to read a followup story in which this predator receives some overdue karmic payback from an even larger predator. 5*
Different than your normal fare for certain, but nevertheless, another great work. 5/5 stars.
Dewey Cheatham
"The man gave a brief sniff of the cork and nodded his approval"
Sure sign of a poser. There is no real reason to sniff the cork. The cork is offered to show the info printed on the cork matches the bottle.
An allegorical tale reminiscent of an ancient myth or perhaps an offering from the opium addled imagination of Poe. Surprising deviation from the typical JB Literotica fare. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you.
I remember reading the previous story and I must say that I enjoyed reading both. Always enjoy a good story from you and looking forward to the next. Five stars. Thanks for sharing.
I really don't know whether to like this or not.
The descriptions and the dialog are excellent, and the imagery is sharp. Beyond that, though...well, I just can't say.
What an amazing twist from the stories you normally write! A fascinating Sci-Fi Fantasy twist !!! I didn't see that coming until he finished the young maiden.