All Comments on 'That's My Van'

Keep on writing your enjoyable stories in 2024!

5

Dang, that was a sad one.

Would have liked the story fleshed out a bit more, but it's your tale.

Death for adultry is extreme in all cases.

Conviction probably for manslaughter or a lesser charge. Confess, do your time and Minister to other convicts would be my preference. Maybe also bottom for a few guys to help them cope. That would be real penance.

Thanks for the work.

A compelling tragedy in the style and locale ‘Fargo’. What in the world is a ‘southern boy’ languishing away in the frozen tundra for. Great to see a new story. Thanks very much.

A tale of cheating and tragedy. 5*

I read a little lesson years ago, didn't care for it but the characters didn't seem familiar here. Also a good question was raised, why didn't the cheaters just open the van and escape?

5 Big Blazing Stars for an interesting read. My only question is why they were trapped in the Van.Why couldn't they get out? Thanks for the Effort. Buster2U

Thank you for starting us off with a new story, but that was a rough start to a new year. A very good story, but a sad ending for all concerned.

Your attention to fine details is mind boggling. And I mean that as a complement.

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A fine story. thank you.

Darker than your usual. Great story, please keep writing.

I mentally added a cliff that the van went over to explain why they didn't just open the doors.

As always, no shortage of broken people to build a story on - LOL! 3.8*

So the MC committed only murder in the second-degree. But LW is still happy.

I see the story as a missed opportunity to ponder whether JC loves a Christian minister who murders his wife and her lover.

Sad for Sid; quiet desperation seldom ends well.

A sad one all the way around

But your ending killed it. Not sure what you were thinking with this but oh well.

Goid story, but bummer of an ending.

And the world continued on. And as I look around at my own church and notice the similarity in stories and circumstances, I find it not too odd a story from reality.

I could just see Lori and Dwight welcoming Pastir Sid in hell.

What a tragic story.

A pastor who can'f do what he preached.

Thanks for that somber story @JimBob44.

he took the easy way out

Started out as a decent and enjoyable BTB, but turned into a depressing morass of cringe. What a way to destroy what could have been a good story :(

Great story. In my opinion it was to short. I really enjoy your writing and the amount of detail you add to your stories. So when I read these shorter stories from you I'm low key disappointed, because I feel there is more to the story. I also enjoy the Author's notes. I have actually went back and re-read some stories to just refresh myself about one of the characters listed. Can't wait to read more of your work.

Bad. Where's the story?

Such a sad tale.

4****. Not sure way the van occupants could open the rear doors , you can lock people out but not in any vehicle. But this is your story line.

Still liked the story

Promised myself i would srp making comments on stories. But for this one i jist had too

Utter RUBBISH

Sad story but that’s how life is

Desperately sad, but as always exceedingly well written.

Great little story. Five stars as always.

A waste of time, slow and boring

If I recall correctly, Sid pressed the lock button from the driver's door. It would have locked all the doors. After that, the electrical system would likely have been shorted by the lake water.. No way out, with electric windows, too. Which is why many drivers keep a window breaking tool on board.

By the way, four stars for an interesting story. Unfortunately, not five big blazing stars.

JPB

I don't understand why the lovers couldn't escape the van rolling into the lake.

Good story in many respects, but I read to be entertained. Such a grusome story cannot be called entertaining or uplifting.

Surprisingly complete for such a short story but you kept to the core story and covered everything. Well done

(I wish I could do that...)

Huh? What?

Why would the rev commit suicide? He had provided retribution for the cheaters sin. And I hope they didn't use the turkey baster approach to get the lesbian pregnant.

Always enjoy your Loving wife stories.

I enjoy most of your stories and will continue to read your offerings. However this story just kind of rambled with no direction.

For those that keep asking why they didn't try opening the doors they showed on Mythbusters even bit of water will make it almost impossible to get them open. And in their paniced state they would be disoriented. And if the water was deep enough they showed that vehicles will start to flip upside down. So if they didn't have a clear head it's quite conceivable they would have drowned.

Marked "Like It" for the quality of the writing and the steadily unfolding plot development.

But I really didn't.

Thanks for your creativity, but how about at least a slightly happier ending next time?

MLJ

Couldn’t even get through it. Devoid of any human emotions, conflict, and meaning. Just cliche fodder for the BTB fetishists

A great story of the evilness of religion. I maintain that you cannot trust anyone who attends a church. They have proved to me without exception that they are all murderers, thieves, deceivers and liars. Stay away from church folks as they will destroy you.

Wow, what an ass. What a waste of a decent vehicle. Easily worth more than most of the characters in this story. Nice punt.

Well, that was boring.

If I wanted a double murder / suicide, I would watch a bad television show. This was a waste of my time.

Not what I expected, but more to it than most I read and interesting view and a sadly believable story line.

Out rough and ended terrible.

A most excellent slice of life tale from small town USA. And as life in small town USA is a continual work in progress it has neither a beginning nor an end. JB44 pulls this off remarkably well. Seven out of five stars at least.

Superb quality writing. This belongs in a published work.

Outstanding,

That was pretty sad and unpleasant.

This story brings out a very big L issue with L's rating method;

1. Do you rate on the quality of the WRITING, or

2. Do you rate on the originality and context of the story, or

3. Do you rate on the emotional impact the story leaves, or

4. Do you rate on the completeness of the story?

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1=5*, 2=4*, 3=4*, 4=5*, overall

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4.4**** Hooyah, Salutes

Well ...

I may not have liked the ending,

but everything else was damn perfect.

Top ratings from me.

great story with a killer ending, still thinking about it the next day

Well that was sad, but still thought it was a good, different story. The cheaters got what they deserved. Sid found out Karma is a bitch……

Thanks for writing.

absolute travesty.

Sad but almost real life story.

Interesting story! Well written good characters and dialogue and plot as usual for JimBob44!

Please keep writing what you want and I will keep reading what I find interesting.

Thanks for your writing.

Oh, oh, now that wasn’t anywhere near what I was expecting, I'm not religious by any means and yet have a close relationship with a Vicar, so I know that they like the rest of us are just as normal good or bad, from what I’ve seen in the news lots of religious leaders are going lots of wrong.

This story, good one, little odd maybe but seemed a fun read to me

This has the makings of a good ghost story. Good work

I am certain it is just me, my mode or whatev, but I could not follow the plot. I admit I was scanning, but why.