All Comments on 'Twist to Remove'

One of your best stories.

Simply outstanding. You transcended the btb genre and created a Cajun cultural frame that ai found fascinating. I became completely immersed in your tale. Furthermore your characters were complex and captured my interest. In short, an exceptional writing job. And this one is now a favorite that will keep me company on those cold winter nights.

5 stars

A really good story. Realistic characters about realistic life how people deal and cope move on. Actually this is really one of the better stories I've read and love and wise categories in several months.

A solid 4 stars

Nice to see Kampala again! Good story, too 😊

Another great JimBob44 story. The more your read, the better they get because of the world he has created and the various characters that recur and have a back story. Keep writing, please; your stories are among the best in here.

Thanks for sharing...

Very entertaining as always. You’re dialogue is simply fantastic. Thanks again.

That was a good one. Men do not always have to be depicted as arseholes

One of your best. Very enjoyable, thank you!

Writer seems.to use the word I an awful lot at beginning of sentences where it isn't needed, it was like the writer was starting almost each would being spoken as I, thus being a third person reading it to using another word as it that person was talking directly as first person. Extremely poorly use of this style of writing, you didn't pull it off at all.

Knowing how to switch from first to third person writings in any story requires someone with a lot more talent than what you have displayed, I have to say I did struggle to read the story as it was so poor presented in the speech point of view. You also only briefly described each person and some not at all, the reflections of the past were nicely placed but that was offset by the rest. I cannot rate this as I don't hate or dislike it, but I never found it average or good either.

Then there's the end, drawing in characters and who they are from other stories is this a gimmick to get people to read those other stories or just had no further dreams to think up new names making this story different.

First and last time I read anything by this 'writer'. Disjointed, needs editing and I gave up with the below paragraph, whats with all the fucking 'I's'

"I, okay, I, well, you got this? Yeah, I know, you got this, Samantha babbled, giving Cynthia another kiss. "I, you need anything, you just call, okay? I, bye Sweetheart. Bye Cynthia. I, Mommy misses you already. Bye."

Honestly, I felt the plot bored me at many instance of the story.

But George was a good man. Cheezy kind of a good man.

Almost borderline to the SIMP beta male. Still couldn't take eyes off bubble butt.

At least George didn't go begging Samantha if he could touch bubble butt again.

I almost really was expecting it any moment as I did skimmed a lot of paragraphs.

One thing this story is two pages too long. It could have just ended in two pages.

There was no drama -- This was just so monotonous.

But at least George did moved on.

And I guess Samantha's gonna be regretful she threw away that blissful and stable life for nothing. Thanks for your effort JimBob44.

Next to impossible to read with the attempt at dialect . They just came off as uneducated hillbillies. And where did the baby’s come from at the top of page 2? Not your best by a long shot

Some boring shit right here

Meh. I tried to like it, just didn't happen.

Just lovin' it when a new story of yours finds its way to LW. Among so many other things, you have such a fine ability to write voices. By the way, it is impressive how many distilleries are in the JimBob universe.

Wow! Epic. Amazing writing. Love how you never seem to write the same story twice.

Love your stories. Y’all keep on writing ‘em. I’ll keep on reading ‘em. Thank you. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Ehhh, I didn't like this story 😔... I had a few issues with it.. he comes home after being on a oil rig for 14 days.. he is served with divorce papers, restraining order claiming verbal abuse, she empties out their account to ensure he doesn't have enough money for an attorney.. than they go to court and sister girl is sporting a 4 month abbay bump.. that's when he finds out she's been having an affair for months.. here is where the issues starts for me.. he doesn't get angry😕.. he doesn't feel like he's been played. He's actually nice to her... even when she brought her boyfriend to their divorce mediation.. he even gave her a ride when her boyfriend leaves her stranded... maybe it's the vindictive bytch in me.. but I would've drove right passed the slut🤭🤷🏽‍♀️.. she picked him!. She threw her husband away for her boyfriend.. it's no longer my business how she's getting home.. she better call an uber or lyft.. I'm ok with people filing for divorce when they've fallen put of love with someone.. it happens.. but that is not what happened here.. she was trying to rape him in the divorce not because she loved her new rich man and wanted to be with him.. no, according to her he planned too much.. she resented him planning their future.. so she decided a man that planned nothing but what liquor he wants that day is better suited for her.. I juat didn't like this story.. there wasn't any emotion in this story.. there was no feeling of betrayal... despite her being pregnant and her saying it was not his kid.. he insisted on a paternity test.. certain betrayals just aren't easy to gloss over... it was the way she did him that made me dislike her.. it was the way she fuck'd his brains out before he left for work only to have him served as soon as he steps on the porch.. she emptied their account, accused him of being a domestic violence abuser, she did her best to rape him with no lube in the divorce. This wasn't something that just happened.. no, she was planning on this divorce for a while.. she was able to smile in his face, pretend to be a loving wife and even fuck him good one last time.. knowing she planned on divorcing that ass ASAP 🤣 🤪 😏.. she was able to be in his presence and not feel an ounce of remorse or guilt for cheating and for what she had planned for him.. but for some reason, dude kept harping on her bubble butt.. the same butt she willingly gave to her boyfriend but denied him entry into.. I didn't like him or her🤭.. he gave me wimp beta bitch tease 🥴🥴🤧.. even her lover confused me.. he found out it wasn't his kid but he still proposed? Why?... this whole story made little to no sense.. these characters were weirdos

Just love your stories. I get so caught up in the characters and their lives. I gasped when “coon-ass” appeared because it took me back to a recently passed friend who was creole and used it all the time. Thanks again for the story. Always eager to read your latest.

Nice.

Always love seeing a new JB44 story posted.

I found it very confusing and what I take to be Cajun dialogue hard to understand, but then I am only a simple Brit.

I usually enjoy JimBob's tales, but not this one.

Grew up on the Texas/Louisian border about 25miles from the Gulf between Orange, Tx. and Vinton, La., half the family Cajun. Love the natural lilt of the speech patterns and the memories of the offshore work your tale brought back to mind. Your writing style and slowly developing plot were perfect for the story, as was the wonderful conclusion you created.

Thank you for a walk down that road less traveled by me for the last 50 years. Damn. Makes the heart glad... and ache at the same time. Any chance there'll be more to come?

Love it especially bringing in the other characters

Samantha’s like the dog with the bone who drops it for the bigger bone, only to find it was only a sparkly reflection. A humbling lesson. Give her two points for dumping William, at least. Oh well, live and learn. Thanks for another pleasing couple of hours in Cajun country.

I always enjoy reading your stories. Real life situations , but a different world. Thank you for sharing your talents!

Women and men trade up differently, even if there is sometimes overlap.

Men want youth, and nurturing. Women want power, and status. She thought she'd trade up in this tale. Will had seemed to have more money, his car was a status symbol. Her ex was a penny pincher. Most rich people are. But poor people see celebrities and think the rich spend money like it's nothing.

We are more than just social animals though. When she 'traded up', she showed an ugly side to her ex husband. So ugly he'd probably never take her back. Humans value their history a little more. She never tried to get him back because he'd clearly moved on to a younger model. That, and her history is enough to make her scared of trying. A great story truthfully walks that tight rope of base animal instinct and higher cognitive awareness. So, this was a great lil' story. Thanks.

Always enjoy a visit to DeGarde with you - 5*

Good story wrong place

Great as always! This is the first posting of a loving wife story in a while. Hope you can post more soon I always love your stories. Thank you for sharing and they are never too long.

I thought it was a very good story as most of your are...

5🌟s

Fred

I thought the story started well but it dragged on a bit and was too long for not much to happen. I also found it difficult to follow at times. Gave 3 for the effort put in.

Belongs in non-erotic

This is just too much of a mess to tell it like it is. Sorry but the 'English', is just too much, for me. If it were edited, and rewritten, it may be readable.

Rating: Outstanding Read ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Just another Outstanding Read ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐. Your stories have a feel to them of real life in LA. Cajun roughnecks and Cajun women both make “family” real family. Neighbors extend that family to create what most people never see in a lifetime. This in not the only place in the world it happens like that. But it is sure nice to see it in your tales.

Once you see family in that kind of light you never forget what beautiful life and love can be in this world. It might not be perfect, but it can always be there.

Thanks for writing this one.

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

This story was obviously well thought out, had a good plot, and character development. But no matter how hard I try, I just can't get into the Cajun accents. I mean, I'm not prejudiced against Cajuns and I think the accent is fine in a movie. But to try and read a Cajun accent that permeates a story is like pushing a truck up hill. Just not for me. But hey no doubt others enjoy it.

Thanks for another wonderful story! Appreciate ya'

Liked it very much. I like your writing style and the calm and collected demeanor of your characters.

5*

Sigh….that was a strange little ride. Enjoyable, as most of this author’s tales are….but still weird.

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George’s reaction to wife’s divorce was very odd. Like he didn’t care. And Sam waited until months after tne divorce to share with HER family what tne fuck she was doing? And tne root of her problem was that she wanted more $$$ to spend? George was truly blessed to be rid of tne idiot.

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But then George’s new squeeze Charlene bonds with Samantha? WTF?

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What was also weird was even at tne end Sam never really regretted tossing aside George.

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Finally…no revenge on William from George?

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Just didn’t make a lot of sense.

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3 ***

I Was concerned with the syntax. Then, I began to think about place names, off shore oil, and a couple of other (looking for a word) things and the light came on! Cajan These people are speaking Cajun. Good story

Yeah, I ain't sorry in the least i read this. 🤗

Clever how William got the boot. I liked the story. LP

Any day a new JimBob story shows up is a good day. You never disappoint.

Five stars without a doubt. Thank you.

Another fantastic tale from you!

Has JimBob ever disappointed? Five stars

Learn English properly 1st.

What a romance. Lucky guy!

An entertaining story very well told. 5*!

Good story. I really like stories where the good guy gets screwed, but lands on his feet better off. Ask me why? 😃😎 5/5

Story told very well but there no turning back.

I would like to point out the Notes section at the end of this story. This author has written stories with crossover characters that are to be found in categories OTHER than Loving Wives. Because the prevalent subject matter pertains to those interests, not That of LW. JimBob44 hasn't just lumped his work into LW for the sake of convenience. For all the writers of interracial, bdsm, fetish, gay/lesbian or whatever. This is how you do it. You would garner a great deal more respect from the readership if you allowed us to choose to search out your works elsewhere. Instead you try to forcefeed your values on the greater LW readership then gripe about your rejection from the abundance of the Anonymous readers and quite a compliment of named readers as well! Literotica on their part, doesn't seem to do much to enforce categorical postings. They seem to take a 'comme ceci, comme cela' approach to postings. If you mentioned that the main character is married, then hey, it's obviously a LW story. It makes no matter that by that definition, most stories on the website should be in LW as there's a married couple probably found in most of them!

JimBob44 my hat is off to you. Even if I never read anything of yours in the other categories know this. It isn't because I think you're a lousy author, it's just that I don't care for the content of the other categories. You at least made it possible to avoid material I don't care for BUT your notes ALLOW ME to read them if I CHOOSE.

The disclaimers that some writers, sometimes put in at the beginning of the stories mean little to me. They only mean that story should not, in all likelihood, have been posted in LW to begin with. To me they are fair game for comment and very critical critique. Not liking fetish stories about cuckolds does not make the people negatively reviewing them closet gays or wimps. It just makes people angry that other people refuse to recognize the boundaries they as a writer have crossed by imposing their views on a group that by and large don't agree with the writer's lifestyle. IF a LW reader WANTED to read cuckold stories, they would be over in the Fetish category browsing through them!

I wish you had worked with an editor on it, because bad grammar is harder to overlook in a good story, such as this one is.

You are a great story teller. I kinda feel like I'm stealin when I read one of these for free. Sure handed feel for these people and their world. This yankee even finds himself using some the Cajunisms you use. Thank you.

5 Stars.

To anonymous who said "Learn English properly 1st": Have you EVER been to Louisiana. Go there, maybe you learn something.

Very well done. Thanks.

P.S. Your list of characters and the stories in which they appear is getting to be as long as some stories. You may have to post it separately and just link to it! (That’s not a complaint. I appreciate your doing it.)

P.P.S. I lived for some years in southern Louisiana. Brings bac some memories, yeah.

Going by the comments, this is surely a great story. But DAMN it's hard to read that Hillbilly syntax!

l loved it. It took me a while to realize it was Cajun. Too bad the prick is still 'walking upright' as they say. The Bear approves, 5 stars. Like your style, man.

The BEAR

Great story, 5*

Wrong category. Should be "Non-Erotic". The focus of the story is not cheating, reconciliation or revenge. Also, there is no sex.

I enjoyed your tale. It was a bit predictable, which isn't always bad, but some unexpected elements are always welcome. One thing to think about: This is the first story by this author I have read, so while reading, I found it odd that characters kept being introduced by their entire names, and almost right away. I found it a bit jarring. Reading the epilogue, I now understand that these characters are recurring characters. I think that is a pretty cool thing, having your characters appear in multiple stories you write. However, my suggestion would be to leave most of the characters w/ just their first or last names, and then clarify in the epilogue. I just think it flows better.

Good story. It is very similar to many JimBob stories. If you like this one you’ll like his others.

Good story but would have preferred if George and Samantha had ended up either together or at least much closer than it ended as.

Awesome!!

I liked it, nobody shot, stabbed, electrocuted, or had their face painted. The wrongdoer got her punishment, yet could still atone and come out whole. The hero got the girl.

Wow, George was such a bastard. He kept a clean house, was responsible with his money and is a great dad.

Nice story.

I know the words were English but I think we speak different languages.

Top marks for a very enjoyable story.

OK story but lacked some for me. However, I love the fantasy angle where he is the worlds nicest guy and has a big breasted 19 year old just waiting to pick him up when he is down.

However, I would not have helped out the ex. I would use her misfortune as my way of getting full custody, if possible. Being off shore for a month at a time would go against me I am sure but I would try anyway.

Great story. Loved it. Five stars’ Thanks Jimbob44.

Loved it as usual!

Has JimBob ever disappointed?

Yeah actually quite frequently. His stories are a mass of cliches, tend to be hard to read and feel sort of thrown together when it comes to dialogue.

Maybe they are good but I havent finished many of them, and this one kept the staus quo.

I worked offshore for 30 yrs - it is not a forgiving environment and not everyone can make it there. The people you work with are your other family and you depend on each other to survive when things go bad. And they do go bad at times. When everything goes south, it makes the news and maybe not everyone comes home. Culture wise, it is more similar to military in a lot of ways, but without the months long separations.

Never the less, years of those week or two week separations stress any marriage and many don’t survive. The spouse that stays home has to be strong and independent, capable of handling the inevitable crisis that ALWAYS occur while separated. The spouse who is away offshore has to trust his/her spouse’s judgement and not second guess. They also have to stay focused on the here and now of the environment they live and work in offshore, regardless of what may be happening at home. If they don’t, they can get themselves and/or others injured or killed.

From the way her character developed, Samantha was never going to last in the type of relationship that working offshore for a career requires. Charlene is too young to know if she can succeed where Samantha failed, but one can hope. She and George really need to discuss and ensure she has at least some understanding of what she is signing up for.

Some of your stories are too depressing. This one has good balance

This is a confusing and uncomfortable tale. It seems Incomplete and not done. The characters appear inconsistent and wandering. Hated the ending that doesn't seem like an ending.

JimBob44 this was an excellent story - definite 5 stars from me.

I loved the characters, you did a fantastic job of giving them believable personalities and excellent dialogue.

I really hope you expand and write a follow up to this so we can see of achar and George do, how Samantha straightens our her life and glimpse at how Cynthia gets older.

And dpi would also like to see maybe a spin-off short story about Foster and his wife. They were so darn likeable!

Please consider a part 2!

Good job, JB!

Money? She started fucking this entitled obnoxious Peacock cause he's got money? And she's been fucking him for weeks, months, but all she thought about was his money and his cock in her ass? Until she, finally, had to live with him. Oh, then she see's the light. Yeah, no. This whore is not unqualified to be George's wife because she is so shallow and selfish and immoral and has no self respect or character, no. This whore is not qualified to be George's wife because she is too Stupid to be anybody's wife, at least any decent man. So we have another Martian Slut Ray character fault. Or, George married an empty vapid bubble butt whore, and he got what he married, so he got what he deserved. So of course George is not sorry, its partly his fault: he put himself in this whore's clutches. Hell, if she could have gotten away with it she would have robbed him blind, stolen all the marital assets, and not felt the slightest remorse or guilt. And we are supposed to feel Sorry for some dumb ass who can't tell the difference between a woman and a wart hog? The only person to feel sorry for in this story is Cynthia, the child. She's got fucked up genetics, a whore for a mother and a deaf, dumb, blind man for a father. Good luck with that combination.

It was a very fun story to read, and I liked the language and the cultural renderings. I did find it curious that we are told the Race of only one person in the story; why is that? Why was that one person's race so important to the story, or to the author? I think we know. We got the signal. Thanks for the effort.

5 stars, as usual. Thanks for posting.

I'm always amazed how you recycle characters from other stories!

5

I have to laugh every time some anon complains about the dialect, too funny. "Learn English properly 1st" isn't even a proper sentence, so maybe you should take your own advice. Also, JimBob likes to add mistakes on purpose, which also makes me laugh.

As always, JimBob does a great job of making his characters authentic. Thanks for another quality read.

While some may gripe, I tell you you always tell a well composed story. Like reading Benji, you keep my mind in the game until the end. And yes, I always get to the end, yeah?

Well done, please keep em coming!!

over all a 5, but George is abetter man than me. Because, I wouldn't do shit for my ex

It always amazes me how ignorant some people that never contribute anything can be with their comments. Nice story, I appreciate stories that are refreshingly new.

For the record: “ Chocolate flavored Iron Barrel Whiskey?” BLEAH!!

Always a great story wish it was a longer. Hope u post more on the loving wives and the intertwining of caracteres in other your other storylines make everything just blend together so well. Thank you for always make a great story!😊😊👍

I love the tales of De guard Louisiana, it is quite its own universe:).

I will say that a person like George can be difficult to live with, a life totally planned is not all that interesting. Samantha was an ass of course, but you can see where a George is grating.

1 star - The grammar was just too poor to bother trying to read the story.

Thank you... though bloody m$ is getting better with its spell check.

I loved the dialect your characters spoke with.

I'm curious to see how you deal with William Carter if you decide to write a story about him? Hopefully, if you write one,he'll have a rough time of it. Thanks for story.

You need to learn english properly in a way where readers are engaged throughout the entire story.

If you are doing this intentionally then it's fine,

"rnebular"

I think whoever wrote that comment must be thinking in terms of story writing & not in the “Grammatical” sense.

Comment - "Learn English properly 1st", is still understandable in any writing,

This writing lacks when it comes to keep & hold readers’ attention, continuously irritating, the way sentences are formed.

At surface level that’s fine but not on deeper level it sucks.

That Comment - "Learn English properly 1st", is still far better than the sentence structure of this entire story.

Not really up to your usual "burn" standards...

Ooweee Lard.. Lagniappe never change dis dialect..

TY JimBob44 stay true to your creation. 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 no façade

Again, a good 'un from JB44. Keep 'em coming if you please.

The dialogue was very nicely written. You captured the syntax, inflections and meter of Cajun English perfectly. Especially the dropped 'to' and other prepositions--perfect writing. One big miss was the A&D Ointment. Come on, couyon, e'body use Dr. Boudreaux's Butt Paste... As for Cajun women, you write 'em well. Maybe, too well, you get my drift.

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Laughed at this: [The Zydeco band was a good band with an annoying singer. The blind guitar player sang every song through his nose, giving everything a nasal twang that just did not suit the music or his voice very well. But the band itself ground out some lively music to stomp around to.] I bet we been to some of the same venues! And them's the ones always got a cover of 'Jole Blon,' right?

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I love the world you're created, and want to thankyou for lettin' me enter it again!! 5++++++/5!!!

<<<If I ever spoke to anyone who speaks the way you wrote this story, I'd either shoot them or myself. NO ONE speaks like that to my knowledge.>>> Drive through Acadiana sometime, you knucklehead! More REAL people per square mile there than in any blue-state shithole. The fucking dumbass who wrote this has never been out of his cocoon, spoken to someone who didn't think, speak or look like himself, and that dumbass sure never heard a Cajun speak.

5 stars, loved the characters, loved the story...

I was in the mood for this one. It was funny and damn good. 5*

These stories always have a gritty realism that’s a nice change of pace from the cyber-ninja/black-ops/assassin stuff that I see all the time. And somehow, I always seem to understand what they are saying. I wouldn’t have given her a ride though.

Once up on a time I lived in Lafayette Louisiana the native population do talk and live like they are still in the swamps. The music was great and the food was indescribable, you just did not want to get crossways with any of those good old boys, something could happen to you.

Another super tale, JB. It never ceases to amaze me how many commentators insist that you get an editor, which would, of course, destroy the story unless said editor was named Theriot or Robicheaux or Guillot or... And three of them (82 total at this count) actually accused you of writing a hillbilly story! I suppose television and now social media can be blamed for the ultra-homogenized, ingrown, ignorant US culture, but... damn! You keep writin', cher, hear? Then I keep readin', me.