by JHErotica
Hope they can keep this a secret! and the father not finding out who the stud is that breeds his wife!
THE STORY WORKS, I MEAN (IT) YOU'RE STORY ITSELF) IS OK. (Somewhat realistic reasons for why, your general setting works, and to somewhat of an extent, your characters work well, or well enough). BECAUSE THIS IS ONLY YOUR FOURTH STORY, I WAS and I BELIEVE RIGHTLY SO, IN THAT MANY OTHERS WOULD AGREE, {I WAS MODERATELY LEANIENT} AND THUS, I GAVE YOU AN OVERALL RATING OF 4 FOR THE (silly NON-MILF sounding) LANDING STRIP. Excuse me, but "MILF" ------ that does still mean "MOM I would LOVE to FUCK" (MILF).
So, MOM (IS over 40 old (yes!!!) or AT MINIMUM old enough to produce an 18-year-old).
In my 29 years on planet earth, I have only fucked 17 MILF's. And for the record, none of them were shaved, bald ass teens with razor burn, chaffed pimple covered mounds, and stubble growing out of the pussy zits often associated with razor happy teens. Not MILF's.
Possibly you might want to tag this one as landing strip and lean toward losing the MILF background, Or support your MILF opening by going full bush or possibly trimmed, that is if you can find one on 50 ladies over age 40 that you SERIOUSLY think's trim up anything in that area! SERIOUSLY!
bit of a cliffhanger there. So much more to come, right? Right? The waiting...oh, the waiting
The writing covers all the Writers' Workshop criteria, so kudos on that.
Even though the outcome was known before even the first word was read, the pacing of the plot development was steady throughout so that anticipation did have time to build.
Looking forward to the coming chapters whether they attempt to keep the truth from the husband/father or not; as to that decision I would anticipate that the father would find it arousing for his son to be fucking his mother, which would make more sense for the fucking to be safely and inexpensively done at home.
Please keep writing.
MLJ
Hits home as I have always, since I was old enough to get a hard on, loved and lusted after older sexy women.
You have to keep going! I love the description of the real kind of mature mothers body and the set up. Please continue SOON! 👍
Oh come on, they're going to fuck each others brains out. You lost a star for stopping just when it was getting good.
Excellent beginning. I can't wait to read chapter 2. There is nothing better than a woman who swallows loads of cum, especially if it's mother sucking her son off and swallowing his load. tom.denver1946@yahoo.com