by Todd172
... so I will leave the first of a zillion comments. Great, as always. I. Love. Your. Work. I write for a living so please accept this praise for its face value. Please keep up the good work.
What more can you say?
Love your writing, love the series and love that you share this for free on Lit.
Appreciate the amount of work you, the missus and your team put into the story so that we your humble readers can get so much enjoyment out of it.
And once again...please consider publishing this so we can throw our money at you!
C
I absolutely love this series! I jumped on this the minute I saw it over everything else
This series—and all the “Shack” stories—are always fun reads. When one posts it’s like a ray of sunshine, only grittier.
Thanks!
It's always a pleasure to see another of your 'shack' stories appear here. They hit all the right spots and this is another 5 star read - keep them coming and I'll keep reading!
How many of those Steyr AUGs were there at the scene when Needles and Delaney left?
After all it would be a terrible thing to just leave guns laying around.
Have done all your stories excellent stuff keep up the great work
Wonderful writing. I laughed through the whole thing. Where do I find my coupla uppity women? Just asking. Thanks for this 5x10^10 *.
Another brilliant addition to the family.
^5errrrrs from Aussieland
One great story after another.
You really need to get this stuff on Amazon.
See the story of the Repo man and the pomeranian. It would be a blast
That hasn't been said by just about everybody.
Never mind a book, how about a movie?
Like cream, Todd is rising to the top. The story and the story telling are both exceptional. This is what we look for but seldom find on the internet. This is some seriously good stuff!
I mean, "She attracts trouble? I'm thinking Delaney could sit on the couch eating cookies and watching TV in her pajamas and there's a good chance it'd end up in a shootout." ROFLMAO!
Your visuals and characters are simply amazing and highly intriguing enough to simply be automatic MUST READs every time you place fingers to keyboards.
I'm wondering when you turn pro on us?
will be able to say we knew you when.
You have a great future as a novelist, get busy and get on with it. I'll buy anything you write!
Brilliant!
Thanks Mr Todd & the missus for a fantastic read.
This story made my day! Always a pleasure. Thanks again
So.....the trial period worked out did it ... nice to see he made an honest woman of her ... but you put Delaney together with Mackenize and Tess ... don't think the boys of the world are ready for that just yet ...
A relatively gruesome week just jumped positive. Thank you.
Exciting and fun, with some great major and minor characters. 5*
I asked for more N&D and got it. Unfortunately, as potent as this strain is, the high does eventually wear off. N&D, more please.
Very well done and engaging as usual. Keep up the excellent work
unless i am very wrong those guns would be worth $50,000 each if they were legal and probably more
You have to read it all at once. Just two words: Thank you. All the bad stories posted this month are forgotten when we read this work.
Would be interesting in a cross over for "Monster" to come for a visit. He and Needles seem to be cut from the same cloth.
with all the main characters and their roles defined to a T, TK U MLJ LV NV
Great stories, great characters, I am a fan!!!
where the main characters attempt to live a decent life with their family, friends and work. TK U MLJ LV NV
A great, big smile comes over me every time I see "The Shack" show up on the list. Keep up the fantastic work, we love having something meaty to read for a change!
5 stars as usual more needed how about a Tina and TJ story real soon
The only thing I can compare this with is the movie Blood in, blood out. Profoundly immersing writing and the characters are so splendid in their creation the connection is immediate and real. I feel like taking this author hostage (in a real careful kinda way) meeting his every need and revelling in his creation. Thank you for what you do.
Thanks for another installation. Needles and Delaney have become my favorite characters in The Shack series. Well done, hilarious dialog, and an awesome story line. Keep up the great work.
Keep up the excellent writing. Can't wait for the next installment.
This series Rocks. Still think that Netflix, HBO, Amazon or Hulu ought to option the whole "Tale of The Shack" series for a video series. Keep up the series!
I just finished your story. It was hard to get anything done today, I wanted to get back to reading. Keep writing and I now have you bookmarked so that I can keep up with your stories.
......exceed expectations. Five stars, and I'm looking forward to their next story. Thank you.
It took a while for me to remember who was who and how they were connected, but it all came back to me.
Great Storytelling
Have read all the Shack stories & all of them Top Class
5*s
SoS
Please tell me you'll write for TV or streaming. This stuff is so much better than the dreck out there, from the plots, to the characters to the dialogue.
Long live the new king of Lit. and L.W. , you really need to go pro !
Long wait for this but well worth it, hope you keep this storyline going.
Loved it!....What would make it great for Me... Needles finds out Delaney is his Biological Daughter.....THANKS FOR A TOP STORY 5 Stars. ★★★★★ WOOF !
Always love your Shack stuff. But this is like the third installment on Needles and he might be the least interesting character. This was not as engaging or easy to read as some of your masterworks, but way above the floatsam and jetsam that LW has become.
Gimme a little Monster, or Blue Eyes, or their kith and kin.
You have created many great characters in your stories but none are better than Needles and Delaney. I hope there may be more about them in the future. Thanks.
It’s worth the dollar to say that you have written an un-fucking-believable story AGAIN. More typos and editing errors than I was used to from you, and I still have trouble with Charlotte’s motivation, but I laughed more through this one than any other. Outstanding!
With the above (or is it below?) comments. All of your ‘Shack’ characters are excellent. Delaney is about my favorite; she is like Monster only with a soul. You really should novelized these stories. A series of stories. And then screenplays. Oh hell, I forgot that you don’t work for me. Just a suggestion, then. I would buy anything that you write, and probably many others would as well. Stay Todd172 as a nom de plume. It’s perfect. Just sayin’. Thanks for writing. JPR
Loved, loved, loved it! I have enjoyed the development of the characters and the story over time. I enjoy the humanity of your characters, flaws and all. Thank you for writing and sharing these stories. I look forward to your future stories in this world of yours. Thank you.
You put out another piece of absolute gold. I cannot recall a better storyteller, ever.
Just what I needed to lighten a crappy week.
Yes!!!!
your story was great, Im not much of a reader but I couldn't walk away. Keep up the good writing.
I think @Todd172 "The Shack" are actually the best in LW...It's always a pleasure to read them...Just like this one...5*
I love all of your Shack stories but I think Needles and Delaney are probably my fafourite characters.
As multiple prior comments have vouched, this is pro-worthy. It had juicy supporting
oddball character parts , hiss-worthy villains, terse dialogue veering into humor lane . I really enjoyed the narrator's hospital visit with the gold digger ex. If I had to nitpick , there should have been a flash of what got him to ever commit to such a psychic disaster.
Loved the disparate settings as well from wrecking yard, the mountian king fortress , the jail . The closing reveal scene that paralleled the Maltese Falcon was cherry 🍒 on top of five star sundae.
Ergo the obvious score
Full marks *****
You are by far the best writer here on Lit, bar none.
The stories, the characters, the dialogue, the mannerisms, everything just blends together and brings them all alive (until killed, lol).
5/5 is the best I can give - but it's a lot more than that.
Please keep writing.
and it probably has, you really should be making a lot of money for producing written work of this quality. 5 star of course. Thank you so much!
Great characters. Great dialogue.
"I blame it on streetlights." LMAO!!
Here's my dollar for the jar. Worth that and more to get to hang out with Needles and Delaney (Sheree is pretty great, too). The banter exchanges between the characters remind me of some of my favorite Elmore Leonard, Joe R. Lansdale and Carl Hiaasen stories.
You know, of course, we all know a Mookie in our life, one way or another and you hit it on the nose. Thank you for that!
...is a really great fucking day. Oh shit that cost me a dollar. Damnit, two dollars. Mother fucker. Damnit son of a bitch, I’m going broke! Shit.
I went back to see how Todd's stories have been scored. The lowest score is 4.36, and the highest is 4.90. That pretty much says what kind of writer Todd is.
My only question is: Why weren't most of the stories 5's? Personally, I think 4.90 should be the lowest score.
Your stories are unique. Characters and actions are well described the emotions implied. Quite the opposite of other well written tales here. I was hooked with Shameless, the first of yours I read and find each new character as much fun as the first. Thanks,
You my have a future writing great stories in a place where some men like to suck sperm from another man out of their wives. haha. But to a better place. Love your story 5 stars and thanks for sharing
Great story, characters, plot...hell...everything! (Oops...there’s another dollar for the swear jar!) Three cheers for the continuing adventures of Needles & Delaney. 5*
Finished a Jim Butcher book and a Neil Gaiman book this week and enjoyed this Shack installation just as much. Would love a new Spooky story please.
This is high quality, commercially publishable writing. It makes writers like David Baldacci look like amateurs. No, it's not deep, but the characters are well developed, the plotting is interesting and propels the story forward at a fast pace, and it has suspense, humor, and real attention to important detail to make things realistic (like Tom Clancy). If you says it's over the top, it is; lots of action stories are. What matters is creating characters that the reader cares about and a plot that draws a reader in. Todd172 accomplishes that with the help of his wife, who must be one hell of a woman. This is an order of magnitude beyond 5 stars.
"What do you expect for free?" look like assholes. This is not what we expect for free, and we know what its worth. Thank you for being so talented, and generous.
One favor. Please let him keep the AUG's. And the AP ammo. For Delaney, for later.
Thanks again.
The story didn't need all the profanity, but it was an interesting and enjoyable read regardless. jtaylor
It’s always a great day when a new story from you pops up. You’re probably my favorite fucking author on Lit.
Shit - now I owe two bucks to the swear jar.
What is this? Could it have been 5.11? Just very courious. Your stories are great!
This series is one of the best I've ever read, and I've read, literally, thousands. I love Needles, Delaney and Sheree. They are truly great characters. Thank you for your time and effort, you and the missus. Fantastic!!!
Lively, well paced, with great characters and as always, a very entertaining read.
Top job
5*
I come her to read erotic stories, and stumble onto one of the best action series I have ever read. To make matters worse I need to know Emmett Tuckett's story! And I wouldn't mind a follow up series with a grown Delaney and the two girls from "camp." Thanks for some great reading.
Many of the stories in this section are very dark, but you seem to be able to inject a bit of humor into yours. Enjoyed this one immensely keep it up....
Another great story from the Shack. Only just published and I'm already craving the next one!
Thank you most sincerely for the best story collection on Lit.
Another awesome Shack read. Thank you & the Misses for it. Can't wait to read more of Delaney's future. Five Stars!
Enjoy the SHACK series very much. But this one dropped a notch. The characters are great along with character dialogue. But this one came across...for lack of a better term...busy. I am not a writer and probably have no business to critique, but this one for some reason was off compared to the others.
I call it a solid "4". Everything else in THE SHACK series so far has been a "5". Perhaps it was the story in a story aspect. The Mooky story would had been better as a stand alone with a bit more detail. But the Mooky minimal story line seemed to had added clutter to the primary story line.
Great stuff. I was hoping to see a Jinx story. It's been too long a wait.
Wish it could be 10 stars. great read! Really Great! And it definitely should
be a TV series. Love Needles and Delany! Think about Selling it as a series!
Delaney and company are my favorite characters ever. Wouod love to see more of their stories often.
I sure hope that we’ll read more chapters with
Needles & Delaney. I love these characters
you’ve created...Thanks for the great reading.
LeFrog.