by HeyAll
1) "Naked backside and voluptuous rear end"? That's redundant. Surprising that you'd make that mistake. You're an excellent writer.
2) You always write " The End" at the end of your stories, but the way they are written, it seems like they can be continued. They never truly end. Maybe write multiple chapters. Your writing warrants it, and your readers demand it. :)
Enjoyed it immensely. Usually I'm not into humiliation, but when it happens with consent, respect & dignity I can handle it. Well written.
Made me wish that I was there to join in and to observe the festivities!
This was wonderfully written. Right from the time of the interview to the description of Anne's orgasm brought on by Linda the details are great. I don't agree with one comment that says you write the end and this could go on. I believe it has a perfect ending.
Glorious story! I'd love to read another adventure about Anne and Linda
It's very well written and very erotic, I'd love to see you write more to extend the story.
There are only five stars available!
Fantastic! Don't stop now! What happens next?
We should cum more often. Your story reminds me of "Eyes wide shut". A powerful orgy in a very exclusive mansion, with many wealthy people. I'm glad you didn't exclude the help.
I think this particular girl just became the consort of a queen.
In any case, I like going over your stories no matter how old they are. Thumbs up!
The description of the manor is delightful.
And the transformation from 'pretty' to 'sexy' is beautifully written.
I would like to make one constructive criticism (and wish for a sequel).
I find the description of the husband a little hasty, too reticent.
One evening he tries to embrace his wife, and suddenly he decides (on his own) that the marriage must be 'saved'?
Perhaps it would be more interesting to devote a flashback to the husband's motivations, years and years of assiduous frequentation of BDSM sites.
I understand that your cup of tea is lesbian situations, F+F, and that's a beautiful thing,
but one of the main characters is supposed to be the husband, and for the time being he's not a main character.
Perhaps a Sequel, could describe the husband's loneliness, so many years of repressed desires...
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There are real pearls of wisdom: among the best quotes:
A) "Keep telling yourself that," Kristen replied. 'Your husband obviously feels that there is something missing in your relationship. But if you think that everything is perfect... [SHARP]
B) "Think about it, would Steve argue with you while your nipples are exposed?" [GENIUS]
C) Maureen thrusted her hips. "I'm...not...old!" [MASTERPIECE!]