All Comments on 'Schrodinger's Bedroom'

This is LW, no one was married or cheating so it doenst fit the category

Also at no point did you highlight the cheater's consequences, which is the whole point of the story for those who arent looking for cuck porn

And why didnt he fire the secretary of his who was obviously in on the joke?

Was sound.

What a delightful story! You could have called it "Schrodinger's Pussy". I loved it. Five stars. April was one lucky lady. I wonder how things sorted out in the other world.

Really good story but he should have sacked Gail (his secretary) as well and given her a bad reference eg. "she's an untrustworthy bitch who contributed to the brake up of my relationship with a girl I had intended to marry". I mean why keep somebody in a position of trust when she did what she did, especially if she was such a good secretary she would have known his views on April Fools jokes!

A well-written and coherent story. It didn't matter that his GF might have played a cruel joke on him. If she'd play such a joke, she might do any number of other thoughtless things, cheating included. 5*

I dislike practical jokes so this excellent story resonated with me. Nice read.

Excellent. Love the fact it didn't matter!

Great read though the ending was too short. Still a great read though.

I like the humour, and wasn't too nasty to the cheating or unthoughtful partners (as you said, could be either). Thank you.

Very well written and very very fun read.

Nice story, well written and plotted. Good job.

this will go over so many peoples heads.

Lujon2019, his secretary probably did not know about the joke. Sarah most likely just told her she was doing something special for Felix and to let her know when he went home.

Well written at the outset. Thought it would rate a 5, however at midpoint it became more than a little trite and ultimately disappointing.

Good, well-onceived and -writtens story. Keep it up, NSC

It,s outside the box compared to most stories in this forum.

@lujon2019 It fits the category, you just don't like it. And that's fine. The cheaters did face consequences, just not big ones. The free loading ex lost his free room. That especially hurts when you're lazy. The ex wife lost her husband. And she lost a lot of her friend's and family's respect trying to prove her point. She told them all her sick and twisted 'prank', and now everyone believes she's a cheater. The few that believe her probably believe she's cruel. And let's not forget she got dumped easily. The blow to her self esteem is massive.

Good story, loved it!

Great story, Enjoyable and well written. I really liked the logic of the either way scenarios. It's a live-in girlfriend rather than a wife but I think that's close enough, and they were both "betrayed" by their partners. I think the consequences for Sarah were that she missed out on a very comfortable life because she did not have any empathy with her boyfriend at all

@lujon2019: As someone who's been here for the last twenty years, I'll take it upon myself to answer your questions.

1/ Laurel (the owner) said many years ago in the author's forum that girlfriends and Fiances were perfectly fine in LW.

2/ The consequences to the girlfriend were pretty clear. If you feel you need it spelled out word by word, perhaps YOU should have written the story the way you want.

3/ I agree about the secretary.

@Author: Nice story. I really liked you picking up on that old physics theory to underly the action. I do think there's been some recent thought on the Schrodinger theorem that disproves the idea, but that hasn't been proven either. 4*

I can understand why it is getting low numbers - not from me - it fits the genre, it is very well executed, and it will be way over the heads of most readers. But you already knew that.

Oh, and I wish you had been my physics professor!

I keep reading comments along these lines:

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This is LW, no one was married or cheating so it doenst fit the category

Also at no point did you highlight the cheater's consequences, which is the whole point of the story for those who arent looking for cuck porn

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Would someone please post a definitive guide as to what an LW story is supposed to be? Preferably from someone that actually knows, not just some shit from someone with a "personal" opinion.

Very enjoyable. It was well-written, easy to read and with a light humorous touch. It also nailed the 'It was a joke' BS comprehensively.

And the girlfriend lost a billionaire-nice!

I would argue that the story does fit the category. The story is about how MC got a loving wife (in the literal sense of the term). As for consequences for the cheater, the story wasn't about the cheater, it was about the MC. Her consequence is being relegated to a closed chapter in the story of his life (and that nobody believes her story of nothing happened. To her friends and family, she is a slut)

Great story. The big issue with humor is you have to know your audience. Everyone has a different sense of humor. Cross the line and you offend them. Sarah should have known that Felix didn't like (hated) practical jokes and pulling a joke about fidelity can cause a relationship to end. She pulled her prank and suffered the consequences. Maybe she'll grow up.

Nice story. While this probably belongs in Erotic Coupling it doesn’t really matter when the story is good.

I love that his name was Felix and the tie-in to the famous experiment was nicely done. Given the theme i half expected April to be Trans or a hooker sent by Sarah. I’m happy that the plot did not get that intricate though as it was a tender love story.

I’m glad this was recommended to me by my friend Leo.

"It was just a practical joke." - Wasn't he home earlier than expected? So how would they know to "fake" sex right at that time? Apparently Gail called?

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@Anonymous Re: @lujon, they weren't married, so ex-girlfriend, no ex-wife.

Made for a great take to start the day off in right fashion.

Cute and entertaining; it held my interest. 5*

I remember the cat from an episode of Big Bang Theory. Funny stuff. And I liked the fact that he knew he was done with Sarah without opening the door.

4 stars

Loved the story. Upsetting others is cruel, not funny. I can’t imagine being in a relationship with someone who thinks so.

Note to Lujon2019: there are lots of stories under LW that involve a fiancé or person in a supposedly exclusive relationship cheating on their partner. It’s a similar kind of loss and it’s hard to see what category might better fit. And the point was that what she did caused him severe emotional distress as if she’d cheated, whether or not she physically did.

One last point: we don’t know that the secretary knew the girl was going to be that cruel: she might have just told the secretary, “I want to surprise him when he gets home,” or even “I have a little prank to pull on him for April fools.” Let’s not fire a secretary who may not actually have been an unindicted co-conspirator.

Thanks for the read.

I really enjoyed that story. Thank you for sharing. I normally let things lie but if you ever get bored I think it would be interesting to read a follow-up from Sarah’s point of view and how the eftermath affected her.

Nearly perfect simple tale. Feeling: 10. Composition: 10. Moral acuity: 10.

It might have been stronger without the didactic preface on the implicit cruelty of many jokes, but that is just a quibble.

I hope that NSCarter continues to contribute to the LW space on this site. It would raise the level.

Lovely story, and quite well written. 5 for sure. Just enough of the angst that drives us all nuts these days, a counterpoint of two genuinely nice people finding each other in the midst of the drivel, and "pots of gold at the end of rainbows" for both of them - so they can stop further hesitancy and live well. The best use of the "Schrodinger's Cat" problem that I could have imagined. Well done, sir!! You are The New Dickens; master of April Fool's Day!

Very interesting story, very well done

What I don't understand from several comments about the secretary being "in" on the shitty joke. Sarah only asked the secretary to call her when Felix was going home, nothing more. So how was the secretary complicit with the "joke" ?

Nice twist on the April Fool genre.

Good story! She demeaned him even if it was a joke. A lover does not do that, especially in that way.

My only regret is to say that love is never as quick and easy as in this story, or so it seems to me. If only it were...

And don't let anyone tell you what does and does not belong in LW. It's a concept, not a law.

Interesting and made me smile at the end.

Hooked

Very well written and very entertaining.

5*****

A Self-Burning Bitch! What'll they think of next?

She knew he hated practical jokes, and tried a pretty big one. I'm with Felix, he didn't even need to know what was inside the door. Great story.

Great story. I have the same take on jokes as the MC in your story. Especially when someone is the blunt of a joke. Another thing about the joke and him not opening the door is that a person's perception is their reality. His perception was that they were having sex thus that was his reality whether they were or they weren't.

I enjoyed the story, and read it because my friend Leo suggested I'd enjoy it. (Thanks, Leo!) I too remember the cat from the Big Bang Theory. I think he showed remarkable restraint not opening the door, and no sane person would pull such an April Fool's joke as Sarah did. My guess is that it wasn't a joke. I guess, however, the point is that we'll never know, unless we "open the box!" 5* ~~JB Edwards

Well written. I liked how April found him and how they fit together. I also felt Sarah was not telling the truth.

Delightful!

Well done, showcasing the loss of trust which occurs with these stupid April Fool's jokes. They stopped being funny after you turn 11 (if not before then). The mental immaturity to think they are funny is staggeringly low.

5/5

I think Sarah was lucky, believe me, life is long if you have to deal with a stiff with no sense of humor. She dodged a bullet.

Fun, interesting and easy to read. Thanks. The opening was kind of a drag but I guess it was needed. Lucky for me it picked up speed and was a smooth read afterwards. Some writers you can see were the story is going, I didn't see it but I kind of think it was the only way it could have gone. Nice. 5 Stars

Why do all these guys have shitloads of money? Minus one point for that.

Good story!

5

Retire the trophy. Best April Fool story winner.

Believable characters, great plot idea, and well written. Bravo and thanks for writing!

Nice.

Very serendipitous April fool's story.

4 star.

Thank you author. No cuck story here.

Well done. I loved the whole Schrodingers cat theme to this. It showed something you did that few even attempt to do...and that was effort and thought.

5 stars

There have been other stories about supposed practical jokes but I think I liked this one the best, the references to Shrodinger's cat were classic ( though I agree w the author,Shrodinger either didn't have a cat or was a wise man and has one but never tried trapping it in a box!)

The point really is that whether she had sex w Mark or it was just a joke,both showed immeasurable cruelty towards him. If she knew he hated practical jokes then it is cruel,if she didn't meant she didn't bother to get to know him,didn't care, and also again it was cruel and thoughtless. And if the secretary was in on it and didn't tell him,she would deserve being canned, meant she was a bitch,too. If Sarah told her it was a surprise, not her fault then.

Answer C

So, I have my own theory that I call Answer C. An example is religion. Say someone grew up in the Christian faith, and they are very religious. From childhood they had gone to church, Bible study, and learned a great deal along the way. Then in adulthood they come to the realization that the whole thing just doesn't make sense to them. What I have noticed is that the ones who were really religious typically don't become agnostic or atheist. They typically go from being fervent Christians, to being fervent Muslims, Buddhist or some other religion they typically know little about. Answer C. When you don't know enough you pick answer C on the scantron.

I feel like this story is the same here. The MC seems like a logical methodical man. He has lived with Sarah and knew a great deal about her, and the only thing holding him back was that he wanted to make sure he was financially well-off enough to be married and have a family (I completely can relate as I always thought it was impossible for me to have a child if I didn't have the security of millions in the bank- I know with my thinking our species would have died off long time ago). Even though he believed she didn't do anything with Mark, he didn't like the practical joke. So, the MC completely chucks the woman he knew very well over her one silliness, and was "all in" with a woman he just met.

It's a personality characteristic. Fervent religious goes from one religion to another intensely when having doubts about the first. The MC does the same with Sarah. In real life things working out with April for the long term the chances are slim to none. Just like Sarah, perhaps even more so, the image he has of April is what he has projected onto her. And if Sarah was truly the wrong person for him, then one day the fog will disappear about April and he will realize that he had projected most of what he thought about her.

And there is no bigger aphrodisiac to a woman wanting to submit to her man than the zeros behind his net worth. He gave up Sarah who loved him when he was up and coming, for a woman who he showed he is worth tens if not hundreds of millions on the "first date."

Nice story, but in real life I would bet in another 5 years he would be divorced having been separated from half his net worth.

An improbable and absolutely delightful little fantasy. Thank you.

Smart, sexy, original, and brutal. Also very much on point for the contest theme. Well done!

wonder what is she doing 4 years later? Other than losing a very wealthy man I am sure she is fine.

Hmm, flaw spotted. April Fools ends at noon. He was leaving work at 4. It should have already been over.

I still liked the story.

April Fools ends at noon? First time I've heard of that in my 47 years on this earth. I've always known it as midnight to midnight.

Very well done. Well written and fully satisfying, for its length. Without reading other stories in the contest, you have my vote.

Top notch,

Would love to be in a position to act like this if a similar thing happened to me.

Well written.

loved the use of Schrodinger's cat, especially the explanation of why Schrodinger could not have owned a cat. Well done.

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. Since my son-in-law is a physicist, and wrote his doctoral thesis on Schrodinger, this story really struck home with me.

Finally found a logical application for the Schrodinger Theorem! Never fully appreciated the cat in the box but by not going into the bedroom, he demonstrated that the result of entering was not necessary. He knew the ultimate answer without even opening the door! Bravo!

@sbrooks103x

"It was just a practical joke." - Wasn't he home earlier than expected?

Yes he was home early. "For the first time in a while, I was leaving work at four. I told my secretary, Gail, that I was leaving."

So how would they know to "fake" sex right at that time? Apparently Gail called?

Yes she DID call.... " If you ask your secretary Gail, she will tell you how I asked her to tell me when you were heading home."...

These questions you ask are some sort of nit pick that don't make much sense. They were covered in the story.

Must have been something you skipped over or just didn't comprehend.

Excellent burn story. Sometimes Karma or whatever you want to call it saves us from ourselves.

It Doesn't Really Matter

If Mark was screwing someone he really treasured and thought was his, he would have entered the room to at least make Mark pay if not determine how he could have misjudged Sarah so badly. But his faith and trust in Sarah was so weak that all he needed was circumstantial evidence to end what was supposed to be a life long relationship. If it had not been Mark then it would have been some other act of ignorance and disrespect that ended them. Hell, the bitch didn't even know him well enough to know he would not think their stunt was funny? All practical jokers have at their base personal arrogance and complete disrespect for the person their joking. One only wonders what he ever saw in Sarah to begin with.

Glad he ended up with a decent woman, a real woman. It would have been more realistic and genuine if April was not quite so gorgeous, much wittier and intelligent, and actually had a job the improves people's lives. A journalist, really, is that all she's got? The only blemish on an otherwise brilliant story.

Thank you for your effort.

Why do I care?

I don't!

Don't know these characters. Don't know Sarah... April... Felix hates jokes. Mark is bum staying in his apartment. That's it.

A few paragraphs about Felix. Comes home and hears cheating Sarah. A page for meeting April, a bar pick-up. Goes home to finish explaining to Sarah (another bar pick-up probably) why she must leave. Then happily-ever-after with a pregnant April.

Gave you 2*s.

Good luck on your next story NSCarter.

This comment took to much effort and left me not.......

AMerryman

To all you who need to be reminded. There is a story...actually with several endings called A Joke. Read it. You will understand this one better. April and Mark...great ending. Thank you.

Fun story. I also hate April Fools jokes. I know people who have pulled off major ones that induce emotional pain, and I can’t understand what is funny about causing it: even a quick “April Fools!” Is not enough to make up for it. You really have to commit to the idea that it is okay to hurt someone’s feelings, even briefly. A great test for a relationship, it seems. Did the secretary get fired? I also suppose the ex-girlfriend might not be as much a fun of pranks after losing a share of billions. Nice April Fools for her.

Fun read, a little too rushed but most sex is like that!

The only point I'd like to make is that were I am from, April fools day jokes or pranks can only be executed up till 12 noon. (but maybe the rest of the world thinks differently.) So after 12 noon the fool becomes the late joker, very appropriate in tell this tale.

the real question is, Would she find it funny?

Nice.

A joke is a joke, but a 'joke' is a prank.

Big difference.

This was a good story,

but left questions unanswered.

Why did Sarah pull such an ugly prank?

Why did his secratary ask him if he was going home

that 1. April?

Was she asked to by Sarah or was she in on the prank?

If the latter was right, she needed to be fired.

4 out of 5 from me.

He makes several points about Sarah not being attentive to him, not doing any of the little things for him. When he returned, she didn’t rise from the table to greet him. From Felix’ description, Sara is also fairly immature. All told, it sounds like Sarah was in it for his money.

Lovely little story and a fun turn on a very interesting physics theory. 5*

detroitdave

Really good.

2nd read, still out-f'ing-standing. He hit the nail on the head - it was the logic of DISREPECT that Sarah had towards their relationship with Felix. Door open or closed she DISRESPECTED Felix by her actions.

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But Gail would have to go - who else will she rat to about Felix; I'd have a total failure in trust in her and at that position - nope, gone.

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+5*, for ingenuity and originality, Hooyah, salutes...

I agree that the secretary would have to go. He didn't pay her to set up ambushes at his home.

Great story. He got two great deals that day.

Finally read this, eight months late. Enjoyed it. Had the same thought about the secretary, Gail. Wondered why NSCarter didn't tie up that loose end. The easiest solution would be to delete any mention of Gail. I suspect he missed that because he was rushing to get the story done before the deadline. That's one of the pitfalls of writing. Miss one small point and it acts like an annoying grain of sand in an otherwise excellent story - and it was truly an excellent story.

Best April Fools story ever.

Read again. Best April Fools story ever. Retire the trophy.

SomeOneTwoThree

Why did his secratary ask him if he was going home that 1. April?

Was she asked to by Sarah or was she in on the prank?

When he went back to his place Sarah said:

"But I told you, Felix, you would not have seen that because it didn't happen. If you ask your secretary Gail, she will tell you how I asked her to tell me when you were heading home. I wouldn't have done that if it was real."

[22.08.22]

Top Notch!

11/10 Cats in a Box!!!!!

Apparently I gave you a 5 but never commented. I don't know why, and I don't know when. But it's a well done story and I remembered having read it as I got into it. It desrves to be scored higher than it is, but different strokes and all that.

Creative premise. Good story. Like he said it didn't matter. The fact that his soon to be fiancee would deign to put hik through such torture is enough. It is pretty clear it was a prank. He simply was not interested in staying with Sarah after seeing what she thought was funny. Besides he bonded right away with April. And btw to the commenters, why belabor the secretary Gail? Doubt she was in on it other than Sarah asking her to tell her when he was heading home so she could surprise him. Highly doubt Gail knew the intent or the circumstances. Btw by the tags we know there was no cheating. But it didn't matter. Sarah should have known that he hates practical jokes and that he would not tolerate it. She messed up and lost her man. Too bad. So sad. Have a nice day Sarah.

Just desserts for her own stupidity. She knew his take on pranks. It was a prank, and she didn't cheat, but reaped the whirlwind nonetheless. She was only his fiancee. She blew it. The stuff with April was too contrived for my taste.

Real or not real. Makes no difference. I read in a story quite some time ago, that brought up the following thought. What the individual thinks committing the act, is immaterial. It's how it's perceived by the listener/victim. In this case, he perceived that she and the ex-boyfriend were having sex. End of story. His perception of what occurred is the only one that counts.