All Comments on 'Multiple Units #109'

Great story! Loved it. 5 stars as usual. Thanks for sharing your work with us.

Just confusing. It was interesting to see the reaction/perspective of a non-wimp but still major loser husband, don't get that much at all on here. Usually, all the husband's in these stories are paragon's of men.

Very good story!

5

Oh what happened to the story??

I was sure not sleeping but when I got to a page

I suddenly read "The End"...

Just love entering the world you create with these stories. Flawed people just trying to get on with life. It was a nice twist in the story where sympathy for Randy is lost when he reveals himself to be a self righteous hypocrite and a total asshole.

Rated 5* and look forward to reading more from you.

Glad to see you still writing!

long rambling story with no story, chops around with way too much detail. still don't know what it was about

No clue what the rambling was all about? His characters are really characters!! Jumping all over the place

Randy is a parody of the BTB crowd. Funny! Story needs more sex though. Cheers.

This "story" made no sense.

Mixed emotions. When the story began, Randy was missing his daughter and sad that he wasn’t at her wedding. Then we find out he never wanted to be a part of it.

Which is it?

And if Leslie was such a good-fearing woman, why would she cheat on her husband? She’s a Christian, not retarded.

All in all, not a bad story, better than most; but a lot of unanswered questions.

I have really grown to like how none of your characters are perfect. They are often troubled people just trying to deal with what life throws at them. Thanks

That was boring.

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2 **

I thought Randy was going to be a nice guy, but you really turned him into an ass. I still enjoyed the character study. 4 stars

Started good and I felt sorry for Randy. But then you revealed him being an asshole, chauvinist and sexist.

What was the point of the story?

Itbpointlessly meandered along and came to nothing

2/5

While his family was not the best, he was the worst.

?????

A JimBob44 story is a lot like Kirsten's father's descriptions of long-winded folk. It's not about getting from point A to point B in the most direct method. It's more like letting your boat float down a slow moving river with lots of islands and channels that you can divert into, never knowing where you will come to land. So relax and enjoy the ride.

Great character switch, two very good tales for the price of one. Thank you JB44

I like most of your stories, but this one lost me when Randy turned into an asshole. Not sure why you thought it necessary to vilify men.

So is this the standard cheating wives btb story told from the pov of the cheated hubby's post divorce lovers?

Cuz if so it's a very original idea, usually we read em from the cheating wife or the unwillingly cuckolded hubby and everybody else in the tale is of medium to little consequence. If we read totally from Randy's pov I bet he'd seem totally reasonable and in the right with his anger or with Leslie how inconsequential her fling was or how sorry she was; here it seems we've got the impartial observers view of the typical story.

Kirsten has a life outside of Randy, no true loyalties or prejudice for any of the dysfunctional family and her life goes on after they leave. I like it.

not sure what that was but i do know it shouldnt have been in LW cat. nice little piece of "Kirsten Life" story

oh nvm i see its some sort of series guessing a sort of anthology

What a stupid story. And the worst part is I read it all hoping it would get better.

Nothing happened. Not interesting at all.

Felt like the written version of having eaten a doughnut.

Randy didn't pan out for me either, as he really was an asshole. I think Leslie and the daughter made him into a bitter man. Kirsten was a little too easy for anyone who looked her way, man or woman. I can get my lesbian fix in that dedicated site. I believe this is the first JB44 story that I didn't really care for.

Too confusing and meandering. Interesting, but not engaging. What was the plot? What was the point? I guess your fans understand; good for you. And thanks for the effort.

Entertaining, kept me reading but is just a slice of life.

The last thing you want in your life is someone who tries to nag you to reconcile with people who stabbed you in the back.

Not up to this author’s usual standards. What happened?

Unusual and interesting.

This story seemed to be a part of a bigger picture.

And that limited it's effect.

I see it's strength in making two important points.

The first one is to not rush into a relationship.

Give yourself time to find out what the other person

is really like.

The second point is being a victim of a cheating slut

and a selfish bitch of a daughter,

doesn't automatically make you a good person.

This story wasn't top shelf material

but it was interesting and enjoyable,

Thanks JimBob44.

4 out of 5 from me.

I wouldn't put this at the top of your stories because it didn't have the emotional content of your best stories, but it had its own sense of satisfaction. (Can a story have a sense of satisfaction, or just a person?) You are really the Jane Austen of LW in the sense that your depictions of people and personalities are just spot on. I am not going to give it a rating because I can't convince myself that anything else but a magnum opus deserves a five, even though I think this story does just what it intends to do.

If I ever try again to establish a profile, it will be because it is worth it for the sake of favoriting your stories.

Damn. I was looking forward to Kirsten having a conversation with Leslie and Deanna. Good story.

Disappointed, to say the least. Remind me to run from your work.

GOD i love your stories.

You have the ability to grab a stereotype and stretch it not quite to the breaking point where it becomes even more real than the type that it is representing. This requires that a subject be observed until one can suck the DNA out of it and spit it into a new vessel.

Just the artistry of painting a picture with words. I guess I didn’t realize your posted in so many other categories. I only see

Your work in LW

Would like to see the character chart, how do you keep um all straight? 5