by FinalStand
You're killing me with the short chapters! Ouch, I hate when people say that because it seems we readers have the right to be demanding but, oh boy, I can't wait for more! Thank you for writing!
As I said before - love the repartee and the whole thing!
Yes, this story is simply delightful to read. The dialog and repartee is excellent and then we get the romance between two strong characters who have such unequal power at work. Five stars.
I hope that Gloria isn't just using the lad to get a promotion.
The story is very interesting, and fast moving
Thanks for the read.
Talk about cliffhangers.. Just keep on (I only hope my heart will last to the final one.) I do NOT need to be an English professor to read. I too write like I talk and boy oh boy do some people know it. LOL This story has made you my top choice of favorite author.
" It seems my supervisor; Mr. Chu went by my place " -- but I believe he was fired with 3 strikes in chapter 1 !
Mr. Fujiwara was the one let go in Chapter Two. Mr. Chu has been Eddie's supervisor since Chapter One.
This series is so fantastic I'm losing sleep reading it. Now chop chop, get back to writing - doesn't even feel like we are in the middle so I need more to read!
I was sure I had already commented but I must have been wrong. Noticed when I went looking for an update and was disappointed.
Great chapter. I really wish I had more information about what was up with Cook. I doubt any company would keep here on after being caught shooting an employee like that. At the very least she would be on leave. And HR would not be pushing for Eddie to us unpaid leave. They could be on the hook for a huge lawsuit if he was forced to be there and shot by an employee. Frankly, some other person from legal would have been sitting at the hospital door looking to head that off. And they would definitely not have let them both attend a function so soon when an police investigation would likely still be active
But it sure makes interesting reading.
I look daily for the next installment. Can't wait to see the arc further develop
Great story. Must keep adding to this series.
I hope all is well. I know you said you were blocked a while back. I and your other fans hope to see you back in the saddle ( I mean writing) soon.
Oh, how do you mix business with pleasure ( of course in different time frames) in your story!
While not nearly as bad as some of the "authors" here, you definitely need a good editor
The flow of the story is constantly interrupted when one comes across a missing word or badly structured sentence
I like the story and the characters, I really do, but that doesn't alter the fact that you need an editor
Your story makes really good emotional sense, but logical sense I feel is lacking. If that makes sense. How Eddie treats the Gloria, and sometimes Joyce, makes emotional sense. How he treats Joyce, a deranged woman willing to hire a killer, that is still on the loose, by not being concerned if she's come to terms with everything doesn't make logical sense.
If he doesn't tell Joyce what Gloria has been through, she'll take his forgiveness as a sign that he's even more perfect and try to get him away from Gloria. Why can't he see this?
Thanks for posting!
My father has bipolar so I know it's a struggle. Keep posting and doing what you do. :-)
I really enjoyed the story at the beginning, but as it went on, things began to make less and less sense. The entire interaction with Joyce is off the rails. Nobody would act as either of them have, and most unbelievable is the fact that nothing anyone does at work ever has any repercussions--most notably, being shot by a woman of superior rank in your company, in a hotel room, while she's dressed for sex, and having the cops investigate, and yet not a word of it gets to the company rumor mill--even his closest coworkers don't know who shot him.
It's just too much. I have to stop reading. I'm able to willingly suspend disbelief for the sake of a good story, but this requires suspension of all logic.
Yes there are issues with the storyline in places but it's still good enough for me to continue.
While the first 2 were not anything groundbreaking, they were good enough. 3 and 4 are a big WTF moment. The story is all over the place, A LOT of things make no sense. And while Gloria's personality was kinda cute and interesting, now I feel like I'd avoid her like plague if she was real. Don't just write for the sake of it.