by SimonDoom
Mama needs to read a few more books. How about Mama's Baby; Papa's Maybe, from New Welsh Short Fiction? ~~JB
This story would’ve been more satisfying to read without the multiple uses of the biblical scriptures and used out of context! I could see her having an sexual affair with the pastor with the husband neglecting her. With the removal of the scriptures this story could’ve expanded with new chapters in another direction.
Yet another example of how one can use the Bible to justify pretty much anything lol.
My only gripe, a small one: Jamal says he's had experience but later says he doesn't know what he's doing.
Perhaps it would have been better to stress he was pretending not to know so as not to have his mother think he'd had sex already before marriage.
Still. Well done.
I know you were going for the religion can make people do almost anything approach here, but I really found the "almost every Tuesday and Thursday night for a long time" thing off-putting with the other pastor. From a purely taboo standpoint, it would have been way hotter if she had been using bible verses out of desperation, instead of essentially a rent-a-twat for another guy that used her religion against her before she 'settled' fro her son. If she had used what she could find in the bible out of desperation to *finally* get what she needed, this would have been a home run. Still, enjoyable, but a bit too heavy toward the slut side on the skank-o-meter.
Must have obviously been intentional to make the story work better, but you got one of the bible verses you used in the story quite different, changing it's meaning entirely. You wrote: "Genesis 38:9, Jubal," she said. "You should not waste your seed on the ground. It is a sin. The husband--that's you, now--must save his seed for his wife--that's me, now." how it actually reads, NIV version, anyway: "But Onan knew that the child would not be his; so whenever he slept with his brother’s wife, he spilled his semen on the ground to keep from providing offspring for his brother."
Neither slutty mom nor reluctant, ignorant son are turn ons. Just another overdone cliche story.
Forget the criticism, I enjoyed this. You could see it coming from a mile away.
The woman is not too bright to let the pastor brainwash her for his own fun. She is clearly a retard. As far as I am concerned you should left the bible out of the whole story,bible and porn do not mix, that is a turn off, maybe you should have posted this in mind control, one star.
Tbh, the bible stuff did nothing for me (too creepy) but the incest was first class. Nicely done mate.
great story, well done and timed. no going around with needles words. straight to the task.
I love the story, every word of it. But in future stories, please don't use the word "pussy". Fucking a mature woman I would use the "cunt".
I enjoyed this. DO continue to use 'pussy' (which is friendly) instead of 'cunt' ( which is crude.) I have never kissed a cunt. As for the Bible verses, that is OK, since people see what they want to, when they look for justification.
People don't have a fear of the Bible but God! Just wanted to point that out for your future use. Proverbs 9:10.
5 stars.
I've gotta say I laughed out loud at the punchline!
(Also, you got caught with your favourite spell check fail - you'll find it :))
Loved the story bot did not care for that bible crap and incest is not part of the bible people use the bible for their own satisfaction!!!!!!!!!!! Gave it 5 stars!!!!!!!!!!!! And Mama Told Me Not To Come is a Three Dog Night song!!!!!!!!!!
OK this was a great first chapter. Sure hope the author doesn't stop here, that would be a sin ! As a Strapping young man, he should have been able to recover very fast or e an just stayed hard, for a second round. Maybe in the next chapter mom can teach Jubal how to eat pussy Properly to give his mother some great orgasms. Also Maybe Jubal will ask his mother to shave her pussy too. Please write another chapter..
Hope dad doesn't come home and catch them and kill them both or just shoot himself, in the next chapter. Mom did say if she is on birth control? What if she gets Pregnant by her son, and papa knows he's not fucking her....
Jubal would make a good character name for a western movie. Since momma is religious, she said more as she was coming. "Keep giving me that miracle between your legs." "Jesus, Mary and Joseph, oh God, oh God, Jesus Jubal, yes, harder, make momma come hard!!"
I have heard of the bible and religion being used to justify many things but never incest between Mother and son.