All Comments on 'Life as a New Hire Ch. 12'

Another excellent chapter, i'd tell you to keep up the good work but that's a redundant statment at this point, i'm not sure if you know how to do a bad job.

Man, it's amazing the speed of your writing considering the quality remains superb. I don't know which I want more, the next One in Ten or this series. I'm happy either way! Thanks!

You:

Constantly and consistently come up with unique plot twists? Been there.

Provide great dialog? Done that

Develop Character? I'd buy a FS for president T-Shirt or have one made

Need I go on?

MORE MORE MORE

FS I dont know how you do it... You have one of the smartest, wildest and funniest stories on this site.. I am already hooked on 5 of your stories... You have said that writting these stories take alot of you... Thank you for all your have written so far and will write in the furture... MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!! I need more chapters !!!!!

...but I do listen to and appreciate all feedback. Here is a tiny tribute to a reader from Chapter 17 (I'm working on 19 now). Cáel is talking to Pamela, his very old Amazon knife-fighting trainer (and much, much more), while walking the Manhattan streets late one Sunday night. They share the same twisted sense of humor.

*“I wish you had been my Grandmother,” I nodded.

“Wait – wait,” Pamela held me back from continuing. “Because if I had been your Grandmother, you would have known to avoid a nut-ranch like Havenstone.”

“Are you like my psychic twin?” I teased her. She was right, of course.*

I was looking for a semi-serious/semi-hilarious way to describe Havenstone and, for some reason 'NUT-RANCH' seemed to fit. Thanks.

Great story and dialogue, complex and interesting. The focused logic of these characters seems slightly unrealistic, but only because I live in the world of average educated people. I do believe in people who can speak like this all the time but have yet to meet them in person. Sherlock level deductions seem like the norm for the higher ups.

I am enjoying this story very much. Thank you for the hours of entertainment you are giving to us all.

I am constantly checking the Sci-fi tab to see if you have new chapers. I honestly don't care if there is sex or not, I like alot of the stories on Lit. Yours I really enjoy.

I hope you can keep letting Cael play with his Amazons. If nothing else Cael needs to be there for Aya. Keep up the great storytelling. You bring alot of enjoyment to many people.

A fan from Wyoming

. . . of gab. Brilliant and witty dialogue. Thoughtful observations on human relations. Colorful characters. Just plain good fun. etc etc etc , many thanks.

Awesome story, and I'm totally enjoying the culture turn-about. The finicky mistakes are annoying though.

You mentioned earlier that Brian also had a fiance, but nothing seemed to have developed around that issue. How come?

hiya,

this is one of those great stories i have ever read. pls feel free to write to me at "beldinaldur at the rate of gamil dot com or by skype my name is venkyks. i'm a doctor physicist mathematician psychologist NLP trainer socionics linguist :languages" )) well the other too would be interesting to chat with you.

I tried various permutations of your e-mail and none go through. Send me Feedback and include your e-mail address.

Smith and Wesson and Glock are not the same gun they are both separate companies, separate guns

Dear anon. The Glock 22 chambered for the .40 S&W round.

... and thank you, BuzzCzar.

James aka FinalStand

'if you couldn't find the prerequisite number of bullet holes in the target, everyone assumed the missing bullet had passed through one of the previous penetrations'

This line is so good.

My grandparents had a big yard and an air rifle, when we couldn't find all the holes in the target we also assumed it had gone through a previous hole. I know that it actually happened a few times because all the bullet were in the 'funnel' and one of the holes were extra-large, but most of the time we had just missed the target.

Loving the story, but I gotta say there doesn't seem to be any change in the number of typos(a ton) whether the editors are present or not.

The story, thus far, is outrageously weird, uproariously funny, and disturbingly dark. Unfortunately, it is also in such dire need of a real editing that it borders on unintelligible at times.

... yep. This was one of the reasons I added a second editor as the series progresses. I really hate these earlier mistakes.

James aka FinalStand

So, I’m hooked. Your stories are hilarious, and frankly I love that the main character is a douche. If I were to say anything negative, it would *only* be that in writing dialogue, you break a character’s speech into separate paragraphs and it makes I very difficult to follow who is talking (you are only supposed to break to a new paragraph for a new speaking person). That is my only complaint! Otherwise, I love it❤️

The main characters stance and attitude on the Amazons behavior switches back and forth so much none can follow. His actions are even more erratic, making him a clear figment of imagination. Sad. The plot would have been amazing if the author put in some thought and work on the main character and not the harem building excursions.

"Two types of women find a man 'interesting' -- women who have to have you, and stalkers."

From personal experience, they're often one and the same. They're the ones that pursue you and stalk you after you've broken up or turned them down. This has happened to me multiple times and I (mostly) escaped by changing cars, moving, deleting old e-mail accounts, and completely abandoning social media. There's still one ex that shows up every now and then, but she's mostly harmless--just parks her car across the street and watches my parents' home for a while before leaving.

Anonymous

I pity you. I really do. It is really hard to move on when your Ex is hanging around, trying to mess things up for you by doing and saying all sorts of outrageous things. I am glad to hear you have evaded most of them to date. Besides ... at least you are desirable, right? Even if it is by the crazy ones.

Take care and stay off the back of milk cartons,

James aka FinalStand

Elsa is like the spider that kills its mate after breeding.

5/5

Not certain I trust Elsa. No complaints about style, etc. Enjoying the story.

That is some funny shit Cael is the man.

This is so good and so crazy out there that I’m thinking that this is more a biography than a fiction. First off no one can possibly make this shit up! It must have happened no matter how improbable it may sound. I also say biography and not autobiography because the story finishes with Cael the night before the Great Hunt, then stops dead. So I’m thinking that he didn’t survive the hunt so couldn’t continue the story.

Or the author stopped writing it because it’s so convoluted and has so many throw backs to earlier parts of the story and earlier times in history that weaving it all together coherently and adding the outrageous humour that is called Cael dialog would be a complete mind fuck. Also add to that research required on these ancient events. Yes it’s now widely believed that the Trojan War did happen and the places did exist as depicted by the Greeks as well as the people and the players. So yes apparently finding the city of Troy proves by parallel existence that if Ancient Greece, Spartans, Troy, all the other known players both armies and individuals that were recorded to be there, then the Amazons being there is a minor thing to believe if everything and everyone else is known to be true. It’s more difficult to believe that the only thing false in the written account is that the Amazons were there and thus existed. Now… the info we have on the Amazons is probably all types of fucked up though. Written by 500 year old old white men who knew sweet fuck all and didn’t like to be shown up as ignorant, so they made shit up about apex an predator warrior, female led female super soldier society. Can’t have them looking good after all says the uneducated on this, old white man. Seriously, cutting off one breast to shoot a bow? WTF. So warrior women that primarily used a bow as a main weapon for millennia would have… A- the bow worked just fine and did no changes. B - The bow was a flawed weapon for them so changed their style. C- the bow was flawed for them so changed the bow. D- cut off the tit of every Amazon without anaesthetic or antiseptic controls or antibiotics and killed almost every single one of them.

Now having participated in archery for a decade or so from 18 till 33, I do know a few things. A- I never lost me nipple but I’m a guy. B- we had plenty of female archers shooting in all categories of archery. I fucked a few and they all had 2 tits. In fact one woman was pissed (helped her make light of real trauma) that she couldn’t be an Amazon now because due to breast cancer they removed her right breast and not her left…

I shot freestyle unlimited in the end, release aid, Easton ACC arrows, uni nochs, orange 1 1/4 inch shield fletching applied in a spiral, bow balance, 4x power scope. At 100m I could hit a thing about the size of my iPhone 7 (didn’t exist back then though) laying on its side. Windage is more difficult on long shots than elevation. My arrows left at 310 feet per second. Not fast but defiantly not slow.

Then I got a job out of state and aboriginal communities in the Northern Territory of Australia don’t have archery clubs.