by curious2c
still not enough ... wheres his compensation ... he needs a lot of money .. julie needs to have her old body given back to her ... did joe get castrated also ... would have been right .... joan still hasnt had enough done to her by a long shot ... and those rings still need to go either pull them out or cut them off ... i think castration was not enough ... should have cut their dicks off also
I liked the ending better than the rest curious but whats gonna happen to julie will jon and julie ever get things straightened out like there marriage and will jon get his money from the bank whats the out come of the story curious?
Pat .
I believe you have a iffy story but i think you should put an ending to joan and her associates so they wont come after jon and julie but julie has alot to think about she shouldnt have any say so about what happends to mary or any one she is the reason why she is there and jon is there in so much trouble with joan.
Atlanta,Ga
I like the way this is turning out. I think you need to resolve all the issues. Jon should find a way to bankrupt Joan.
THEN TELL THEM YOU'LL BE BACK FOR THE OTHER
...even from the very first part. Less would have been more. Sometimes, the author did not know how to top the previous nasty behaviour of the female characters. What could be nastier than twelve studs in a gangbang and triple penetration?
That's boring when stretched over 8 parts.
Next time, author, stay a little bit more real and moderate - it would be a better story. An endless string of over-the-top porn is not erotical at all to me.
From me 4* for the writing skills but only 2* for the plot - means 3*.
what is Joan's rewards? what about the money she was putting away from her profits and the business sale? Al and Mary? Joe? The LA group? Jon and Julie? Norm and JJ? I am glad to see someone reverse the issues. How does Julie and Jon deal with the new desires of each. Too much of the same old Gangbang. There are a number of off shoots here. The piercings? Those from the piercings would join Roger and the boys.
are they really suprised at the outcome. TK U MLJ LV NV
You open the bag and just start eating them. There not all that good but you just keep eating them. This story is a lot like a bag of chips, not worth a shit but if you ain't got nothing else to do what the hell. I gave it a 1.
It's amazing! Almost every sentence ends with an exclamation! Can you believe it?! Astounding! AT LEAST NOT EVERY SENTENCE WAS IN CAPS! That would have been even worse! Incredible! He fucked her! She fucked him! They all fucked each other! Bigger! Fatter! Longer! Harder!
The End!
Boom, boom, boom KILL them all. This has just gone over the top crazy. No stars.
This is not just a sarcastic criticism of your story!! This is way over the top, even for Literotica! After reading a number of your stories, it's evident you have no conscience! You are empty!
You really need professional help or put away somewhere in a padded cell!
You really are sick!
Joan is a smart and resourceful person. Judging from Jon's first attempt at escape she is the type of person that approaches life like a chess game. She plans for several scenarios and outcomes. I am surprised that the author made it so easy for Jon to gain the upper hand. She probably would have seen right through his ruse. I guess that is the only way Curious2 could start bringing the story to a close. Still a 5 Star Rating.
Something to get into. I skip most of the sex parts and found out that the story is ok, especially now that Jon has the upper hand because of a true friend, Al... My kind of friend. Joan, Mary, and Roger will have to pay the piper (Jon). Karma is a bitch, but revenge is sweeter. Julie is physically free but mentally, she is locked into whore mode. She is screwed up. Jon is TOO forgiving, not like Al. With all that has happened, I feel Jon should have just killed everyone. Now that is a revenge story...3 big stars and thumb up.
Please get to the end.thankfully your short stories are better. But you cannot write the longer form at all, too much cuck shit for ordinary ppl.
1/5
even though this whole series is fiction, this is still fucked up. The author has no grasp of reality or what consent is. This is very alarming and the author should definitely be questioned or at the very least, have a psych eval.
gave this chapter five stars, but it wasn't worth the misery of the first six chapters of helpless cuck shit.
chapter seven is worth reading for the over the top paybacks, but it wasn't worth reading six one star chapters of powerless cuckold chapters to get there.
@rlrmiller1951: what are you even talking about? There's barely any payback involved. The husban is still a wimp.
So why did Julie save Joe. This should be in the nonconsent section. He may love his wife and she love him but that is it, everything else is non consent