by TrampsAnThieves
5 stars for the story itself, but the complete over use of hyphens and ampersands made it very distracting to read.
Good story. I cant wait to see what will happen in chapter 9. I really do love this story. Pretty cool that the teacher and her ex student got married and she did everything needed to have her name changed
This is really bad. Everything seems to rushed but at the same time little happens. In my class I always teach that if the story isn't plausible then you will lose audience. The entire story is about rushing, whether it be to get married at 18, the sex scenes, any events that occur, and it makes you think the story was written by a young adult who ate too much sugar. Change the premise, learn to write about sex and slow the hell down.
Trying hard to find a paragraph that isn't sex, sex, sex. Talk about overdoing it. I'm sure there was a story here somewhere at some point but it seems to have gotten lost along the way. Author must've been really horny writing these last few chapters. I hope the remaining ones are toned down a bit on the sex front. And a little anal would be nice since it was teased at much earlier in the story.
Still going well and enjoying it. No idea how they can pack so much into a day???
It would be good to include his mom in the festivities, with the blessings of his wives. That could make for more story and less redundancy.