by zouzouni
What a delightful romance. The characters are so wonderful and the bike was fun hehehe! Never been into bikes personally but I'd be willing to try one if it had an Ari on it :-)
I really enjoyed this story so much! Good luck in the contest :-)
his brother was sneaky as well, i loved how he used his brothers jealousy to let him see his true feelings for "his" Ana. 6/5
I very much enjoyed this story. The slow build to their individual realizations that they were falling for each other was wonderful. I knew Ari was hooked when he reacted poorly to the first post-breakup date prospect. A strictly platonic friend would have urged her to move on whole heartedly and not just assume every guy would break her heart again. He might not have admitted he wanted her to himself, but he damn well didn't want her with anyone else. :) I particularly enjoyed both times Ana expected the worst and was surprised to find the opposite of her fears. Once after the ride back to the hotel, and then again when he confessed that he loved her. I think you captured the fear of rejection really well. Chris pushing his brother to accept his feelings was a nice touch as well. (Even if I would have pummeled him for the dance move!) Great job and good luck!
Honestly I hardly ever read anything that is set in the regular world. What i mean by that is I always read fantasy of science fiction. I read vampire and werewolf stories, things like that. I figured that i live in the real world, why would i want to read a story set in it. I always thought stories set in the normal world were boring. Congratulations, you have just single handedly changed my whole outlook on these kinds of stories! Well done.
Really enjoyed this. Moved a little fast but that's okay, so does life some times.
Loved every written word! I can’t express how romantic this was and how sweet, so GOOD LUCK in the contest!!!!!!
Seriously, this was one of the greatest stories I've read on here.
It was cute, romantic, and totally realistic.
You deserve to win this contest, my friend.
Every so often, I find a story on Lit that I have to keep reading and this is one of them. But, being a M/C rider (not a Harley and not familiar with the soft tail), I didn't see Ana and Ari have their first coupling on a motorcycle until you told me. I could have missed something. I also thought after that encounter Ari was rather distant. Though you told me he fell for her, he did not act it and kept Ana guessing as to his intentions.
Just some feedback from an old man. Thanks for your story. I enjoyed it enough to comment
Others have said, but this is a wonderful romance. Enjoyed it immensely.
I have found that I am really into stories with a bad boy who has a soft side. Your Ari is a sweet guy with a hot side. Great story. I was very impressed as I like storied to be an escape thus my favorites are fantasy, psy-fi, vampires, etc. I have to admit this story was wonderful. Also, I am into Ares, the god of war, so I loved his name.
It built up so well to a lovely, albeit expected, ending. It is "Romance" after all. I guess I'll have to read the rest.
Thanks.
Not much of a commenter, normally, but I wanted to commend you on your writing style as well as the quality of your story. The characters were easy to relate to and the story was entirely plausible. There is a nice flow and rhythm to your writing that makes it easy to read and get into. It was a sweet, romantic and sexy story that I thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you!
Great flowing romance with that HEA after ending that is always welcome. A nice way to spend the morning :)
I liked the story very much. This really was a romantic story and all the time I was reading it I was really happy and relaxed. This is one of the stories which can make you happy. I really liked it. Keep it up. Hope to see more stories in future.
I love coming back from a long trip and having so much reading to catch up on. Much of this story sounds very familiar my naughty zouzouni. LOL!
So well put together, so entertaining. I wish I had a motorbike, and was in contact with mysterious lady over the internet... hang on! I do, and I am!! LOL
I loved how the character profiles were developed, and how there was nothing in the story that was pure fiction. Everything of the story had real life love story written in it. Keep up the good writing.
I've read all your single stories in one sitting and am just now commenting. They are so well written, romantic and sugary sweet I just could not stop reading. I noticed the dedication and a previous comment and can't help but wonder how much of this is actually true (lucky girl). Now I can finally get started on your longer series'. Congratulations on your beautiful works. Looking forward to enjoying more.
A very good story, and, in my opinion, very well written. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Seems like it would be rated higher than it is. I know I’d certainly rate it at a 5 Star level. Thanks go to the author for posting it here.
Did I miss something? When did Ari remove his clothes in the bedroom scene? Did he greet Ana at the front door naked? It doesn’t say.
She frowned at his possessiveness. If he’s possessive (around his brother, yet) this early in the game, something’s wrong.