All Comments on 'Elf Patty'

A sweet story, cudoes.

Merry Christmas, JimBob 5*

I noticed only one typo. It was not worth finding which page it was on. Overall a good read.

Excellent character development and plot pace throughout. Liked the synopsis o the stories with all of your other characters. Keep writing more.

This story, improbable as it is, really made me smile!

Thank you!

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An unusually positive slice of life.

The field goal was 63 yeards .

Stellar tale.

It could be a dark Hallmark movie of redemption.

Nice writing.

Great story on top of Christmas Holidays. Five stars as usual for this fantastic author. Thanks for sharing your work with us.

Super!!

Nice story when it all comes together, worthless son finds his calling and becomes responsibly. Daddy finds some love that's carrying his grand child, yeah, that'll work. The heart knows what it wants regardless of age. 5 stars.

A lovely Christmas treat.

Very nice story!

Cute, and nice story of redemption?

5*

Very nice story. Please, please continue this story line.

Good stuff. 5 stars.

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Merry Christmas, JimBob. Thanks for all the stories!

Great story. I have to tell you how much I like when you go over what characters we have read about in other stories. I have actually gone back and re-read some stories just to be reminded of the characters.

Good stuff. Very enjoyable. Thank you.

Great story Jim Bob, Merry Christmas to you and yours.

Very nice, pity the real world is shitty

I'm always glad for a new one from JB44. I agree with IC_Thru_U, your describing where we've seen your characters in other stories has gotten me to re-read those tales.

Great story for Christmas and in general!

JB, a story from you showing up makes it a great day. Always seem like old friends, neighbors or relatives !

Hi. I enjoyed the story, I feel that when changing from one location/person to another they should be at least in separate paragraphs. Changing from one character to another in a single paragraph is hard work.

Outstanding piece of writing. Really liked it and the message it had.

Thank you for such a heartwarmibg story. Especially during the Christmas season. I identify with a lot of what Garland gas gone through. Thanks again and Merry Christmas to you and yours

Very sweet Christmas story. Connecting the characters to other titles keeps the attention of the reader. Keep going with the different stories, keep the characters alive.

Love romance! Better than any sleaze.

I think this was a nice story all around. Keep up the good work.

Your stories cover a lot of topics. This one was sweet and fits right in with Christmas. Thanks for sharing and Merry Christmas

Your usual great job!

5

Well done (and a strange place to find a Catholic story!).

Another great story by one of the very best writers on Literotica; thanks for this 5***** gift.

An enjoyable read.

The "here's what xxx is doing while yyyy is doing something else" is a good writing trick -- but to carry it off well, there ought to be some pay-off for keeping the ideas in mind. Maybe it is just that I'm tired, but I don't see the comparisons are especially meaningful, and definitely don't see much growth.

The signs of the son's growth by figuring out he could be of service are a welcome addition. His accepting responsibility is abrupt and doesn't really have much growth to it.

I appreciate the complexity of the world you are building. I am in process of reading many of your stories.

Good stuff. a great Christmas story. 5 stars. Thanks for posting.