by Tx Tall Tales
enjoyed the whole series, can't wait for more.. isn't the name debbie? (not donna)
Another solid addition to the tale. Can't wait for the next one! Somehow I doubt we've heard the last of Aimee!
Wonderful series. Don't know if you welcome suggestions, but have you thought about a kinky twist to a welcome home party? Maybe have a little fetish involved? Anyway, keep up the good work
love this series.... simply love it.....
but it has been nearly 5 moths and no continuation :(
been to long .... waiting for more to Cum!!!!!
Gary
As I read I dream of being Jack. So looking forward to the next installment. Keep up the good work.
bill
Kahan mar gaya bhosdike... 6 mahine se lund pakad ke betha hoon... aur likh madarchod...
I don't know how you can keep your characters straight through all the adventures. I thoroughly enjoyed the story and hope you will continue the CvsN series without too much delay. Lots of possibilities: Boss at work, next trip to Spain, Aimie, sisters ongoing rivalry, Beth going to school, development of the Day Care operation, more Joe and Cathy. The list goes on. Please continue.
Who is Donna and what happened to Debbie? Have I missed something and Debbie was eleminated. What a way to treat someone that sensitive to being wronged.
great series, i really love it. i hope you decide to continue it. lots of potential there. i hope everything works out with debbie, she has had enough problems in her life. every one else could handle an ending, ie beth leaving to go to college or karen wanting someone permenant, but keep debbie. hell, keep all 3 of them and eliminate all other partners as hot as they are. as you get to the end of ideas you should include a final chapter letting us know how things will end up. will look forward to more in this series!
This is a great story, I hope you haven't walked away from it or Literotica. While there are issues with Literotica, it is far better than most of the other sites I have tried. I do visit other sites though, just to remind myself why I prefer Literotica.
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Ok, I love your plot and wish you were making more chapters quickly. This story has a lot of potential to be a large novel.
However, you need to keep better track of your character's names(I.E. getting Debbie's name changed to Donna in this chapter & Karan's name changed to Nancy in a much earlier chapter).
A man is a man regardless of the country and Chris was just too ripe with Debbie /Beth a continent away.
Infidelity is wrong. The scene between the boss who has kids and the protagonist was terrible
Nothing is evil between two consenting adults enjoying each other we all just wish we could
First, I did screw up with the names a couple of times. I originally used different names, and did a global replace. Screwed up. I'm going to have to go back and fix that.
Second, I do agree somewhat with the comments about the Boss. Purely intentional. Jack does not have a lot of moral character, and needs to do some growing up. He's feeling his oats, and is making bad decisions. You can blame the boss a little, and his home environment a lot more. Let's hope he learns something from this... ;-)
Thanks for all the great comments, and I'm still slowly plugging away at this series.
TTT
I'm usually more into the combinations, the menageries our hero's involved with, but this chapter got to me in a way all you guys out there will recognize. I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters.
...he comes across as just a horny guy, but with scruples, so why did you have his character ignoring his boss's position regarding her need to stay faithful to her hubby, and had him continually push her to allow him to escalate the sex. Almost seems to be a contradiction, especially in light of his continual statements of being serious with his two main ladies.
I gave you a low number why you didn't finish the dam story and went on to do more come back and finish it and you will get a higher score
I've read all the chapters up to this and kind of thought that Jack would learn his lesson, but to say he's in a "kind of committed relationship" and then jump into bed with the closest pussy just turns me off. I'm okay with the multiple partners angle as long as people aren't getting hurt but when the main character simply has no morals/scruples and really doesn't care as long as he doesn't get caught, then I don't want to know him.
It's called a character for a reason, if he is of low character then why would I want to know him?
This was very sexy especially as he considered his boss to be Out of Bounds.
In an earlier chapter, you said Chris was a single mother. Now she's married and cheating. Takes something away from the story.