by DevlinMea
Excellent revenge by the sister but I feel the remotes true owner might be annoyed at her breaking it
He raped his sister and his mom and his punishment is to have sex? His punishment should have been to have the desire to have sex but never get an erection. That every orgasm would be either extremely painful or without feeling.
In earlier chapters you have the Gabby is a stepsister so wouldn’t Emmanuelle be her mother and not her stepmother?
Comeuppance twists like this are always lame. They always rely on the protagonist being an idiot.
I love this story. Wish the remote wasn't gone but it just ended so well.
Hated it. Hopefully there's another chapter where he fixes it and regains control.
I hope this motivation for the mc to get better/revenge otherwise it a cliche let down.
nice concept.... but over all disappointing. Lots of tell. very little show. Which any creative writing class will tell you is backwards. Very much a let down over all, could have been oh so much better.
That was one very nasty deviant orientated step sister however, ending the story that way was probably better as if he had glued it back together, his response to her would have taken it to another level of nastiness.
Mixed minds on this story, had a lot of potential but it felt like it went off the rails too quickly.
From a story perspective, I personally lean towards happier endings.