by TheDarkCloud
Would have got a 5 if he hadn't shaved her. As he did it gets a 1, no point ruining a hot woman so others can't enjoy her.
The head-shaving wasn't. You would have done better to leave this part out, when your story would have scored top marks. As it stands ...
It was all good until he cut off her hair, huge turn-off for me and others judging by the comments.
Its a complete mixed bag for me. Gay teacher is fired for rumors but she fucks a whole team of students with no repercussions, another teacher willing to let the nice teacher get fired for an asshole, the head shaving was a final step too far. If he had leveraged that into even more debauchery, it would have been a great story...what kind of loser completely owns a beautiful woman, decides to deface her beauty, and then tosses her away...sad ending
I liked the story - despite the fact that there was a lot of unfairness in it and the head shaving incident. I just imagine her looking like the sexy bald Lieutenant Ilia in Star Trek the Motion picture. The story does ask for a sequel though; either where Holly takes on a new bet and loses again to even more humiliation, or perhaps when she wins and gets her revenge on Coach Rice which might satisfy some critics.
Liked the story and the head shave worked for the story. Would like to see part two soon!
You do know that even consensual sex with a student that is 18 is illegal, right? So why would she risk going to prison and having her career destroyed and a sex offender label attached for the rest of her life?
That's like betting her that she would get a gun and rob a bank. Hell, she would probably get less prison time.
The storyline was pretty good but the buildup was way too long compared to the action. I suggest the sex scene be expanded to at least a full page. I also thought that the action should have continued on until most of the boys had taken several turns. When I was 18, I could cum several times and given that opportunity, I would have wanted to.
To Whackdoodle: First, there are different laws about that depending on where you live, though at the very least she is risking her career.
Second, and more importantly: It's a FANTASY. Requires some suspension of disbelief and isn't meant to be taken completely seriously.
thought the concept was great. The build-up a little too long, and the sex scene a little too short. It didn't quite reach that peak which you are normally capable of.
I didn't find the school-teacher - student thing a problem. Would have liked to see a follow-up with Mr. Price on the receiving end.
Wonderful story, one of my favorites! The second part is a good conclusion too.